Thesis: Despite the strong negativity the penny coin receives, it
remains invaluable not only in America’s pricing system, but also its history,
therefore gaining the approval rating of more than half Americans in a survey,
and its rightful place within society.
Source D (Weller): The United States isn't the only country with a low-denomination coin in the pricing system and two-thirds of pennies do not actually immediately drop out of circulation, but rather only 5.6%, the amount similar to the "drop out of circulation" rate as any other coin.
Source E (Harris Poll): Chart showing a poll conducted online in the United states in 2004, nationwide, using adults of a variety of age and income to vote in favor, against, or unsure of the abolition of the penny.
Source F (Press Release): The historical significance of the penny and the progression of American coinage throughout the ages.
Antonella- Even though I'm the QUEEN of this, your thesis is a little confusing, but only because of a few too many words/weird sentence structure. Maybe if you just tried reworking it, your argument would be a tad less clunky. But you still have a really great argument, so there's that.
ReplyDeleteAlso (and this might be totally wrong, but I know it's the way the history department likes it, so, who knows) but maybe you could entertain the idea of your essay's structure being constructed off of points instead of documents. So like, don't have the whole first paragraph be centered around only Doc D, but pick and choose documents that argue what you're trying to get across in that specific paragraph.
But like I said, I think your argument is great and that whatever strategy works for you is best, so stick with what you're comfortable with.
Great Job! -EH